Week 3 JW Two: Adding More to the Scene

Finishing the reading material about verbs, it is time to write another post:

Continue your observation list of the scene you observed for Unit 3, Journal Assignment 1 by noting several vivid action verbs. Revise some of your sentences using action verbs and/or write 2-3 new sentences with action verbs. Try not to use any of the forms of “to be” (is, are, was, etc.).  Underline the action verbs in your sentences. Again, you will want to keep all of these sentences at hand as you do the peer reviewed writing at the end of the unit.

I try to look at my previous list, and underline the action verbs:

1. Mom is waving out of the balcony wishing me a good day.
2. The two kids are holding their little hands together and signing a sweet song.
3. A little girl, carrying a heavy bag on her back, is bitterly crying.
4. I think she wants to cross the road.
5. Workers gather in groups to take a taxi.
6. Drivers set a competition ignoring all the screams and shouts of people around.
7. Everyone in the street seems so busy.
8. Those two high school boys are crazily riding their bicycles.
9. Her lovely smile is still stuck in my mind.

Some new sentences with more action verbs:

1. The little kids stopped singing and chased a small dog trying to pull its tail.
2. Workers waited long for this day.
3. The little girl loudly laughed when the two boys fell off their bicycles.

Although this activity is valuable because it raises my awareness to a certain part of speech (e.g., action verbs … ), writing the whole description of the scene previously selected needs more verbs and other vocabulary. If I stick to these actions, it impedes my creativity. I spent much time to write these simple sentences. I don’t know why? On the other hand, I find it so easy when I respond to the forum threads and discuss topics with my colleagues. I guess thinking too much about what I’m going to write stifles my fluency of writing as my friend Debbie said in one of her comments here.